Saturday 7 September 2019

Writing argument

Elijah has put together an awesome argument about whether animals should be in zoos, check it out:

This week I was given a task to write a argument about should or should not animals be kept in zoos. This is what I have created, hope you enjoy.


Should animals be in zoos? 
I strongly believe animals should be kept in zoos because Zoos save endangered species by bringing them into a safe environment, where they are protected from poachers, habitat, 
and loss of starvation Many zoos also have breeding programs for endangered species which will save endangered animals from becoming extinct.


Animals are mostly dying from diseases and being hunted but in a zoo they are always being fed and are being well looked after. They are also getting helpful injections that save them from all sorts of diseases 



It is also educating the public on animals and scientists can also study the way they live and how their bodies work and can improve or help the way they live in the wild  it will also inspire people to protect animals and their habitat. 


Overall I think zoos are a great thing because they are well looked after and also saves endangered species and have a great place to stay in a zoo.

9 comments:

  1. Hi
    I am Albin from YMS.
    That was an amazing writing argument.
    Yeah, I know that the animals are dying and being hunted.
    You could add some more pictures.
    Anyway that was an amazing blog.

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  2. Hi There!
    I'm Teegan, a year 7 student from YMS!
    This is a great topic to choose to argue about!
    Why did you choose this topic?
    I hope you had fun writing this!
    Kind Regards,

    - Teegan .J.D

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  3. Hi. I'm Mikael from Yaldhurst School. I really like how you think animals should not be keeped in zoos. I kinda agree with you and kind of don't because lots of animals in zoos are hurt so they need to be there. Next time I think you should add some photos and change the color of teg text because i can barely read it on the black background. Apart from that it is good.

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  4. Hello, I'm Jacob from Yaldhurst Model School I am a year 8 Student. I really enjoyed your'e blog post about how you think animals should. Not be keeped in zoo's next time you should try and make the words a wee bit Light because, The black Front is a wee bit hard to read. But it is a really good blog post about why animals should not be keeped in zoos but keep up the good work bye.

    From Jacob.

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  5. Hello Totara! My name is Parwin and I am a year 8 from Yaldhurst Model School!

    I really liked your argument about why you think animals should be kept in zoos and you have great information in there as well. I also like how you have your opinion and you have said why animals should be kept in zoos.

    This reminded me of when we had to write speech's and my speech was about Racism, Criticism and Judging others. Make sure to check my blog out! This also reminded me of when we had to write something and it was more about why the baddie or what we think is the baddie in some stories isn't actually the baddie.

    I think that to improve, you could make the text white because I couldn't really read it well with the background and everything.

    Did you pick the topic yourself or did you have to do that topic. If you got to pick, why did you pick this?

    Awesome work!



    Looking forward to your next posts,
    Parwin

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  6. Kia Ora, Elijah. This is a really good topic to have an argument about. Personally, I think people should just leave the animals alone and not hunt them. But, yes endangered species should be kept in zoos so that their species repopulate.

    Anyway, there is one problem: I couldn't read the black writing properly, so you might have to change the color.
    Apart from that, it is a great argument.

    Kind regards
    Dion

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  7. Hello Totara class,
    It is Bridget here from Yaldhurst Model School/Rimu Class. This blog post stood out to me because you gave a discription and you also added a picture. Good job. Well done to all of u who have wirtten a arguement. Now I will give you a few improvemets. To start off with you could probaly try exsplaing a bit more. As well as re-reading it before you post. Maybe you could also change the text colour because it is hard to read.

    You could also try to Add a more catchy title.
    But other than that
    Ka Pai
    Bridget

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  8. Hi. I'm Elijah from Grey Main School. I really like how you think animals should not be kept in zoos. I kinda agree with you and kind of don't because lots of animals in zoos are hurt so they need to be there. Next time I think you should add some photos and change the colour of the text because I can barely read it on the black background. Apart from that it is good.

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  9. Kia ora Totara class,My name is Soane and I am a year 7 at Glenbrae school. I really like the way you have explained your details about whether or not animals should be kept in a zoo. I 50% agree with you that animals should not be kept in a zoo. They should be free resting and hunting for there own foods. Other then that ,Incredible work.:)

    By Soane

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.